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UrbanK

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Two contrasting themes over hopefully coherent harmony
« on: November 19, 2020, 02:56:27 AM »
This is meant as a study piece for contrasting themes and functional harmony.

Jerry Engelbach

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Re: Two contrasting themes over hopefully coherent harmony
« Reply #1 on: November 19, 2020, 12:52:34 PM »
Urbank,
 
That was clearer thematically than your previous piece.
 
To be even clearer, end your first theme with a strong cadence, then transition to the second theme very cleanly. You went from C major to A minor, which is fine, but you want to make it more clear where one ends and the other begins.
 
You almost have that at bar 8, where you end with a C chord and what implies an Em7, and then continue in bar 9 with Em going to E major, and finally to Am in bar 10. But those Em chords make the harmonic movement ambiguous.
 
This would be stronger, bars 8-10: | C G7 C - | E7/B - - - | Am - - - | The G7 and E7 require both the third and the seventh of the chord to sound strongly dominant.
 
The most convincing harmony is in bars 16 - 19, where you have F - E7/D - Am - E7 - Am.
 
In the accompaniment, you use a lot of passing notes in the left hand, which tend to diffuse the clarity of the chord progression. It would help to be more solid with triads and dominant 7ths, and move from chord to chord using leading tones. Connect the chords by moving as few notes as possible.
 
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Re: Two contrasting themes over hopefully coherent harmony
« Reply #2 on: November 19, 2020, 01:43:26 PM »
Thanks for the feedback. I really appreciate the detail!

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Re: Two contrasting themes over hopefully coherent harmony
« Reply #3 on: November 19, 2020, 01:44:35 PM »
It may be useful for you to practice composing well-formed melodies first, ones that have a nice arc structure and definite cadence at the end. Realize, of course, that when composers create a melody that they often have a harmonic background in mind.  Once you have your melody, you can then harmonize it.

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Re: Two contrasting themes over hopefully coherent harmony
« Reply #4 on: November 21, 2020, 06:53:05 AM »
I agree with what Jay said.
 
I must add that understanding how functional harmony works is important. There is a large amount of instructional material on line for that.
 
And for creating themes and organizing them in a musically coherent structure, you canít beat the piano sonatas of Mozart as textbook examples of the form. The scores are all available free online.
 
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