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Patrick O'Keefe

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Re: Septet
« Reply #15 on: April 22, 2019, 11:38:19 AM »
However, in toto, it feels a bit 'samey' to me. You have the eighth-sixteenth-sixteenth motive all over the place. You could get some development going and increase the variety by changing that motive around a little here and there. Change it to an eighth note triplet in spots, for example, or have it be sixteenth-sixteen-eighth, or change the melodic dyad into a three note arpeggio, and so on. This would liven up the motive and help keep it from getting repetitive.
I've been buried in non-music for the past few weeks.  I've made lots of changes but haven't put together a clean version to post.  And now I'm afraid the changes I've made have probably made it even more "samey".  Maybe I'll try some of your suggestions before posting a new copy.

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Re: Septet
« Reply #16 on: April 23, 2019, 08:42:00 PM »
The link at the beginning of this thread now point to an updated version.  I probably won't be able to attend to any comments for a few days.

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Re: Septet
« Reply #17 on: June 04, 2019, 09:11:19 PM »
I had forgotten this thread.  The piece is now definitely a multi-movement work  The 1st movement is essentially (except that I tweak it every week or so). The 2nd movement is complete until I decide it's not.  The 2nd movement is undergoing changes to be posted soon.   At least the form is pretty much set.  It's ABA form with the A section slow, The slow, quiet section returns, and is obviously modeled on the initial A section, but the motifs have changed a bit and are in a different order.

I have not started thinking about the 3rd movement, but it will probably be the last movement.   
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Re: Septet
« Reply #18 on: December 08, 2019, 03:59:02 PM »
Judging from my last update of this thread, I'd say I've been away from the forum for about 6 months.  (A knee replacement, a hip replacement, and a smattering of oral surgery has been occupying my time.)

I've updated the links in the first posting of the thread.  They've been messed up for 6 months, I guess.  And I've added links to the 3rd movement.  The first two movements are essentially done.  I find things to tweak every time I look at them, of course, and I'll still consider suggested changes, but they are pretty much finished.  The 3rd movement wants to be done, but I keep changing it daily.

Comments and suggestions are welcome. 

BTW, I see that I have title, composer, and copyright information on page 5 as if it were the 1st page.  I've obviously done something weird in my notation software (Sibelius).  I will fix it soon.  Fixed.
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