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mjf1947

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Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« on: October 22, 2019, 05:46:50 PM »
Okay here's a 99% finished work.

There are some major and minor changes .... editing and a new section in the first theme.

My conception ..... in the midst of a morning commute - crossing the Urban landscape.

Hope you enjoy my efforts here.

Mark
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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #1 on: November 12, 2019, 09:59:11 AM »
Here's the initial theme as a stand alone work.

I expanded the mid-section.  I am still have work to do.

What do you think?

Mark
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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #2 on: November 12, 2019, 03:56:22 PM »
Your piece has a jazzy feel, with interesting melodic material for the clarinet. Definitely continue to expand the length of the work.  Are you planning to integrate this material with the rest of the Broadway Morning music?

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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #3 on: November 12, 2019, 07:12:23 PM »
Your piece has a jazzy feel, with interesting melodic material for the clarinet. Definitely continue to expand the length of the work.  Are you planning to integrate this material with the rest of the Broadway Morning music?

Jay

Thanks for the review ..... I would like to do so ....... It is a question of balance etc.

At the moment there is one transition that I am not satisfied with ...once I successfully address that issue ....I'll review the entire piece in context and decide how to enhance it.

Lot's of work indeed.

Mark

PS: I think I solved my transition problem!!!  ;D
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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #4 on: November 13, 2019, 07:28:41 AM »
Mark,
 
I like the main theme very much.
 
I wonder if its phrasing could be highlighted with more dynamic variety and maybe even slight pauses, to really make it stand out from the overall texture of the piece. The theme kind of sneaks back in at the end rather than decisively announcing itself.
 
The beginning is very engaging, with the clarinet and strings echoing each other. There is slight bit of that later, and I found myself hoping for even more.
 
The whole thing has a pleasing mood. But throughout I also wanted to hear emphasis to propel more sense of direction.
 
Your harmonies and the blending of the instruments are lovely.
 
Cheers,
Jer
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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #5 on: November 13, 2019, 01:06:24 PM »
Mark,
 
I like the main theme very much.
 
I wonder if its phrasing could be highlighted with more dynamic variety and maybe even slight pauses, to really make it stand out from the overall texture of the piece. The theme kind of sneaks back in at the end rather than decisively announcing itself.
 
The beginning is very engaging, with the clarinet and strings echoing each other. There is slight bit of that later, and I found myself hoping for even more.
 
The whole thing has a pleasing mood. But throughout I also wanted to hear emphasis to propel more sense of direction.
 
Your harmonies and the blending of the instruments are lovely.
 
Cheers,
Jer

Jer I agree completely!

Lots see what develops..................

Mark

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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #6 on: November 13, 2019, 02:11:24 PM »
Well .... I combined all the parts and did some more tweaking.

However, me thinks I need some distance from the work.

Some here it is .......

I will come back to it at a later date .... :angel:

Mark

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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #7 on: November 13, 2019, 02:48:42 PM »
Mark, the previous one sounded to me like it would be a mvt in a multi-mvt suite,  the totality providing context for the components. The last one sounds like it is meant to be a stand-alone work. If it is, then I have the following listening notes:

I think you need a transition from section 1 to 2 at 1:28. I did not feel comfortable with the 15 seconds from 2:15. I have a gut feeling that this piece feels as if a bit short/hurried to accommodate the two themes together. I fear to be misleading, of course, I know I may be hearing it differently tomorrow. So, yes, the proverbial grain of salt :)
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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #8 on: November 13, 2019, 06:25:53 PM »
Mark, the previous one sounded to me like it would be a mvt in a multi-mvt suite,  the totality providing context for the components. The last one sounds like it is meant to be a stand-alone work. If it is, then I have the following listening notes:

I think you need a transition from section 1 to 2 at 1:28. I did not feel comfortable with the 15 seconds from 2:15. I have a gut feeling that this piece feels as if a bit short/hurried to accommodate the two themes together. I fear to be misleading, of course, I know I may be hearing it differently tomorrow. So, yes, the proverbial grain of salt :)

You know you never know where you might end up with a composition.   

You make a valid point.  I am playing around a bit and deleted the second theme .... to try for a more integrated piece.

I'll post soon.

Mark

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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #9 on: November 14, 2019, 08:40:24 AM »
Okay- for those following this thread  ;D and those not too sure  :'(

I decided to make the initial theme the main work.   I did some more editing and tweaking transitions etc.

I think this version will meet the suggestions/critics posted.

Thank you all for your feedback!!!!  8)

Mark

PS: For all you that have not engaged in the conversation - I encourage you to do so!

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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #10 on: November 14, 2019, 03:15:09 PM »
Mark,
 
That really tightened it up. The interplay among the instruments is stronger and the whole thing is more exciting.
 
The sections have a good sense of direction. Actually, because the focus is more engaging it feels a bit short. I'm caught up and don't want it to end.
 
I dunno, how do you feel about a coda, with the main theme repeating at the end of it yet again, but with a thicker texture and perhaps ritard to really underline it? (I know, I'm always looking for more drama, a la movie themes.)
 
You have quite a nice collection of short pieces, and their instrumentation makes them accessible for small ensembles. Is there a chance for live performance of any of them?
 
Cheers,
Jer
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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #11 on: November 14, 2019, 05:27:41 PM »
This certainly feels better to me, Mark. I still think it would shine in a suite for the quartet. :)

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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #12 on: November 14, 2019, 06:52:17 PM »
It's good to know I am heading in the right direction.  Every time I listen .... I see more possibilities.

And yes .... Jer ..... I agree with  your assessment. 

If you guys are willing to hang in there with me .... I will continue to improve upon the work.

I'll post again ... when ready ... a coda???? interesting idea.

Mark

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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #13 on: November 15, 2019, 08:51:58 AM »
Well I am still working on the piece ... it definitely calls for more!

A real challenge here ..... I feel even with the many additions I have made -  it ends too soon  with a sigh!

Mark

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Re: Broadway Morning - Clarinet String Quartet
« Reply #14 on: November 16, 2019, 08:51:08 AM »
Okay for all those who are tired of this work!!! :P  But still want a peek at the newer version.  ;)

I addressed the sluggishness of the transition to the ending .... a few tweaks here and there.

Done!!! :angel:

Time to move on to a new work.


Mark
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