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mjf1947

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Clouds Walk on the Moon - Oboe and Piano
« on: March 12, 2019, 02:07:15 PM »
Here's another work done many many "moons" ago.  ;)

The original work was very bloated.  :P

So here is an edited version with a couple of tweaks along the way.  :angel:

Comments appreciated.  ;D

Mark

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Re: Clouds Walk on the Moon - Oboe and Piano
« Reply #1 on: March 13, 2019, 06:51:05 AM »
A pleasant little piece.

I think you should consider reworking this with more elaborate harmonies in the piano part. Throughout I was feeling that this could make a nice impressionist piece with juicy 11th and 13th chords in the piano.
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Re: Clouds Walk on the Moon - Oboe and Piano
« Reply #2 on: March 13, 2019, 10:44:12 AM »
Thanks for the review.  Interesting suggestion .....  I didn't think of this piece as "impressionistic" although there are definitely moments that emanate such a feeling.

I have attached some changes I made to the closing of the piece.

I beefed up some parts and again deleted a measure for better flow.

Mark

PS: I started to play with the "juicy" 11th and 13th chords .. it does enhance the work.
« Last Edit: March 13, 2019, 10:58:34 AM by mjf1947 »

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Re: Clouds Walk on the Moon - Oboe and Piano
« Reply #3 on: March 13, 2019, 11:24:02 AM »
I think it's terrific, Mark.
 
I was going to suggest that perhaps the return to the main theme at bar 36 could use more preparation.
 
But I see now from your attachment that you've relegated it to the left hand of the piano, so I'm not so sure.
 
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Re: Clouds Walk on the Moon - Oboe and Piano
« Reply #4 on: March 13, 2019, 12:07:15 PM »
Jer,

I did lots of editing with the piece .... and there was a return to the initial opening theme in more than one position in the composition.

The result was a loss of impact .... I did away with them.

Thanks for the review.  8)

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Re: Clouds Walk on the Moon - Oboe and Piano
« Reply #5 on: March 14, 2019, 08:21:14 AM »
A charming piece, Mark.  I thought the overall flow was quite good.  Robert's and Jer's suggestions look like they would yield some good results, and I will be curious to see what you can do with them.

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Re: Clouds Walk on the Moon - Oboe and Piano
« Reply #6 on: March 14, 2019, 01:13:56 PM »
I think it's terrific, Mark.
 
I was going to suggest that perhaps the return to the main theme at bar 36 could use more preparation.
 
But I see now from your attachment that you've relegated it to the left hand of the piano, so I'm not so sure.
 
Cheers,
Jer

I took your advice ,,,,

Mark

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Re: Clouds Walk on the Moon - Oboe and Piano
« Reply #7 on: March 15, 2019, 11:16:34 AM »
It's beautiful theme.
 
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