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Works in Progress: Senior / Re: East and West Windows (Sketch)
« Last post by gogreen on March 31, 2019, 06:13:40 AM »
Beautiful work, Jamie. I'm eager to hear the orchestration!

Art
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Works in Progress: Senior / Re: East and West Windows (Sketch)
« Last post by Michel.R.E on March 30, 2019, 08:00:37 PM »
there are some really beautiful lush chords in there.
this is definitely something interesting going on: I'm hearing some vague echoes of Debussy/Ravel for the first time in your music.
(think of the 2 piano work "En Blanc et Noir" or the "Chansons Madécasses")

looking forward to seeing the fully orchestrated score.
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Works in Progress: Senior / East and West Windows (Sketch)
« Last post by Jamie Kowalski on March 30, 2019, 04:42:26 PM »
East and West Windows Piano Sketch

I've been working on this for a little while. This is a piano and harp sketch of what will be for full orchestra. The writing is mostly finished, and I'm really looking forward to the orchestration.
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Ok, so this is my first revision. I redistributed some of the double stops to other instruments, and changed the beginning to have less doubling.
There's also an ending, which I think still needs some smoothing over.

I also fixed the notation issues Ron pointed out. The only one I'm not sure about is why a B flat is preferable to an A sharp here.

I'm continuing to tinker with it, but any thoughts are welcome.
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Completed Works: Junior / Re: Ballad
« Last post by Michel.R.E on March 27, 2019, 04:31:25 PM »
From a technical standpoint, there are a few passages that may prove a bit uncomfortable, particularly the 16th note passage in the viola (the 6/8 part). There are a lot of melodic 5ths. Some are playable, some will be tricky. Some WILL be playable but won't sound ideal.
Playing a melodic 5th on the same string on the violin requires a short extension (that is, fingering 1-4 but placing the 4th finger a bit further than it would normally go).
On the viola, this stretch is a bit wider due to the instrument's length. Just be very aware that this will either imply a slight sliding motion (with the accompanying portamento/gliss. effect) or a skip.
If the 5th is to be played on an adjacent string, the same finger has to finger both strings. It's a slightly precarious position. Not in any way, shape, or form "impossible". But must still be handled with care. Just be aware that in the repeated patterns, if the 5ths end up on different strings it will require hand position changes, or shifts. Also, it will make fingerings a tad more delicate.

Musically, it could use a few breathing spots, as others have already remarked. It has a nice flow to it mostly, but after a while it starts to get a bit monotonous and "samey". Find some cadential spots to pause a bit on, especially where there are radical harmonic shifts (a few places where the normally near-common practice harmony strays from familiar territory).
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Completed Works: Junior / Re: Ballad
« Last post by whitebark on March 27, 2019, 03:22:37 PM »
Lee, I like your use of harmony in your piece. Or course, it could use some dynamics to better define its structure. Stronger cadences marking the ends of phrases would help, also.

Jay
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Works in Progress: Senior / Re: Variations for Strings in A Minor
« Last post by whitebark on March 26, 2019, 09:43:45 PM »
Thanks for the enthusiastic review, Jer!
Yes, the A minor arrives a bit early at the end - I'll consider a change.

J
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Works in Progress: Senior / Re: Variations for Strings in A Minor
« Last post by Jerry Engelbach on March 26, 2019, 11:02:39 AM »
Jay,
 
A fantastic revision. The variations are much clearer now. And such great variety.
 
I love the march. It's witty and somewhat Prokofian (is that a word?).
 
The lead into and onset of the fugue are wonderful, and the fugue itself is really exciting.
 
The chorale is emotionally moving. The Chaconne is a blast! And the tranquil section before the finale anticipates the ending effectively.
 
The ending, too, works very well. However, I wonder if the repetition of the main theme might work with a key change in there somewhere. It gets just a little anti-climactic.
 
Throughout, your harmonies are sophisticated and set the mood well.
 
Congratulations on an absolutely marvelous piece.
 
Cheers,
Jer
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Completed Works: Junior / Re: Ballad
« Last post by Jerry Engelbach on March 26, 2019, 10:42:57 AM »
Lee,
 
It's very beautiful. It sets a wonderful mood.
 
It appears that you're following common practice harmony, but in a few places it sounds a little off to me. I'll give another listen when I have more time.
 
Cheers,
Jer
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All I know is that this piece is a fusion of classical and jazz music due to the rhythms and chords I used.
The themes are quite nice.
 
There could be more interplay between the piano and violin.
 
You could let the piano take over the lead at times.
 
And instead of leading into each violin section with block chords, you could have the piano play its own intro melody.
 
Other ideas: More contrary motion between piano and violin. Less duplication of notes between the lead and the accompaniment.
 
Frankly, I don't hear jazz in it. Jazz chords generally are more complex than triads, and jazz rhythms more syncopated.
 
Cheers,
Jer
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