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Completed Works: Junior / Re: Remember-Solo Bb Cornet
« Last post by Ron on Today at 08:26:42 AM »
Hi,

I agree with Mark. The first part appears to be in D major, but then it gets lost. The mixed accidentals in mm. 19-20 add to the confusion with the augmented 2nds.

You start with two main thematic ideas in mm. 1-3 and the 2nd in mm. 4-7. Why not work with just them and build the piece on these two ideas? You did repeat the opening idea once in the dominant, but then you never went back to it. Take a look at "Taps" where there is just essentially one rhythmic idea: a dotted quarter note followed by an 1/8th note, then a sustained note. Simple works.
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Completed Works: Junior / Re: Remember-Solo Bb Cornet
« Last post by mjf1947 on Today at 06:51:53 AM »
HI,

Two observations: firstly, I don't feel a tonal center in the musical line; secondly, I don't understand the thematic line.  It might help as in "taps" the thematic motif is repeated clearly.

Mark
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Completed Works: Junior / Remember-Solo Bb Cornet
« Last post by Medievalwarfare on Yesterday at 07:49:17 PM »
This short piece is meant to be a memorial piece similar to "Taps," but in my own style. It's very simple, but the high B natural may be a challenge for some brass players to play. If I should change it, feel free to say so.

Score:

https://www.dropbox.com/s/fezrqcv8lw5kbgo/Remember.pdf?dl=0

Recording:

https://www.dropbox.com/s/1lsf21vpapl566u/Remember.mp3?dl=0
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I truly do not have an explanation for the backstory or theme of this piece. All I know is that this piece is a fusion of classical and jazz music due to the rhythms and chords I used. I quite enjoy it, and hope that every one else enjoys it.

score:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/307uwwqhcd5e58d/Dance_of_the_Snowflakes.pdf?dl=0

recording:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/g726bg030oycekq/Dance_of_the_Snowflakes.mp3?dl=0
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Works in Progress: Junior / Re: Dance of the SnowFlakes
« Last post by Medievalwarfare on Yesterday at 10:01:28 AM »
Also, I meant to make the key change at measure 14, not sure 13. It was something I overlooked when editing the score before publishing it here. Also, the key is mostly in D minor, but where I left off, Iím modulating to F minor.
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Works in Progress: Junior / Re: Dance of the SnowFlakes
« Last post by Medievalwarfare on Yesterday at 09:36:44 AM »
Thank you so much for the input. I will change the doublestops and add more cautionary accidentals when I can.
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Works in Progress: Junior / Re: Dance of the SnowFlakes
« Last post by Ron on Yesterday at 09:26:20 AM »
I just looked at the violin part (being a former violinist now crippled with arthritis). The opening parallel octaves are virtually unplayable. There will be distinct and unavoidable portamentos as the only way to play an octave is with the 1st and 4th fingers--so your hand will be sliding up and down the fingerboard. If that is what you want, then you'll have to notate as port.--otherwise the violinist will be struggling (and cursing you).

In mm. 19, 20, and 22 again you have extremely difficult double stops: the A - G over a C and the D - C over an F are almost impossible to get in tune. The perfect 5th is the most awkward interval on the violin--and it is highly recommended that you avoid it whenever possible, despite Bach's frequent use of it--even just moving an interval of a p5 should be avoided. Anyhow, moving from a 6th to a p5 is extremely problematic.

The rest is playable, but in m. 8 you really need courtesy accidentals on the G and F and in mm. 28-30 you need slurs attaching the grace notes to the following notes. I am baffled by the sudden appearance of a Bb in measure 13. If you are going to change key signatures you need a double bar line before it--and it is not needed in this measure. Especially confusing is that you seem to be in D minor in the following section, but then you end the piece on a D#.

You might want to have a look at this post in the Orchestration section on violin fingering: http://www.composeforums.com/index.php?topic=1808.0

Despite all the seeming negative stuff I enjoyed listening to the piece. Keep at it.
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Works in Progress: Junior / Dance of the SnowFlakes
« Last post by Medievalwarfare on Yesterday at 09:01:15 AM »
This is a piece for solo violin and accompanist. I didn't have an idea behind this piece. I simply made it as the inspiration came. I'm open to any criticism or praise for this piece.

score:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/z7w21gwwqon5bvn/Dance_of_the_Snowflakes.pdf?dl=0

recording:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/lcx5miacxnt30oo/Dance_of_the_Snowflakes.mp3?dl=0

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Completed Works: Junior / Re: String Quartet
« Last post by mjf1947 on March 16, 2019, 09:51:11 AM »
I think that this is a nice sketch. It could be the start of a fine work. I would recommend you that you think on expanding on and developing the material for each section. You have a nice arch form established so expand on it and turn it into a substantial piece.

Your echoes in the violins as in bars 18 and 19 and elsewhere might work better if the echo in Vln2 was not the exact same pitches as in Vln1. If you move the Vln2 echo to be based on a different chordal pitch you'll have a more interesting effect.

Regarding the 3/4 part, I personally have never understood the idea of having the way the music sounds be different from the way the music is notated. Why have the music noted in a way where what sounds like the downbeat is notated as the upbeat of beat 3? This isn't a knock on you, I feel the same way when Beethoven does it.

I think the 7/4 section is the least formed at the moment. To me there seems to be a lack of a clearly delineated or distinctive motive here, just some rhythmic interplay (which is cool, as I've said before, asymmetrical stuff is right up my alley).

As I said, I think this is a good start on what could be a fine one movement quartet.

Thanks for the thoughtful review and suggestions.

Please note - I already adjusted the measures you mentioned.  This could be the next project for myself and mentor. 

Mark

PS: My mentor also mentioned Beethoven .... I will attend to the second theme too.
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Completed Works: Junior / Re: String Quartet
« Last post by RJB54 on March 16, 2019, 09:06:20 AM »
I think that this is a nice sketch. It could be the start of a fine work. I would recommend you that you think on expanding on and developing the material for each section. You have a nice arch form established so expand on it and turn it into a substantial piece.

Your echoes in the violins as in bars 18 and 19 and elsewhere might work better if the echo in Vln2 was not the exact same pitches as in Vln1. If you move the Vln2 echo to be based on a different chordal pitch you'll have a more interesting effect.

Regarding the 3/4 part, I personally have never understood the idea of having the way the music sounds be different from the way the music is notated. Why have the music noted in a way where what sounds like the downbeat is notated as the upbeat of beat 3? This isn't a knock on you, I feel the same way when Beethoven does it.

I think the 7/4 section is the least formed at the moment. To me there seems to be a lack of a clearly delineated or distinctive motive here, just some rhythmic interplay (which is cool, as I've said before, asymmetrical stuff is right up my alley).

As I said, I think this is a good start on what could be a fine one movement quartet.
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