Author Topic: A short little etude for piano  (Read 217 times)

0 Members and 1 Guest are viewing this topic.

Diego

  • Newbie
  • *
  • Posts: 10
  • Karma: 0
A short little etude for piano
« on: June 15, 2017, 07:17:32 AM »
Hey guys,

Just posting a short etude for piano I've been working on some here in order to gather some of your thoughts on it. I haven't really gone through the process of formatting and editing it yet, so while comments on the visual presentation are welcome, I think that more of what I'm looking for at this point is reactions and thoughts regarding the musical aspects.

Please let me know what all of you think about the piece!

Dropbox link with audio: https://www.dropbox.com/s/md8vh4970yoeuzj/PianoEtude.mp3?dl=0 (stream-able directly from website or you can download and play it; it's an mp3)

Dropbox link with score: https://www.dropbox.com/s/x4ky5c8426hxkok/PianoEtude.pdf?dl=0

I've also put both as attachments to this post if that's what you would prefer.

gogreen

  • Hero Member
  • *****
  • Posts: 848
  • Karma: 48
    • Art on Facebook
Re: A short little etude for piano
« Reply #1 on: June 15, 2017, 07:28:01 AM »
I liked it, Diego. Ethereal and dream-like. But I'd go for more variety in the repeated phrases and still more dynamic variety.

mjf1947

  • Hero Member
  • *****
  • Posts: 1,740
  • Karma: 110
Re: A short little etude for piano
« Reply #2 on: June 15, 2017, 10:10:40 AM »
Diego ...

I know as it progresses I see a bit of Philip Glass; however, I must admit it truly reminds me of Bach's The Well Tempered Clavier Book 1 Prelude in C!

https://youtu.be/bWEKAZT0QT8

Mark

JPEG2017

  • Newbie
  • *
  • Posts: 8
  • Karma: 2
Re: A short little etude for piano
« Reply #3 on: June 17, 2017, 07:04:22 AM »
I like it, but I don't think it's an etude.  I think it's a part of a much more expansive work in like...3 or 4 movements. ;D

Diego

  • Newbie
  • *
  • Posts: 10
  • Karma: 0
Re: A short little etude for piano
« Reply #4 on: June 17, 2017, 11:20:53 AM »
I like it, but I don't think it's an etude.  I think it's a part of a much more expansive work in like...3 or 4 movements. ;D

Perhaps it could be, if I could ever get around to it  ::). But I need to have a piece for wind ensemble done by the end of September or so, so there's a bit more of pressing matters on my mind right now.

Thanks everyone for the feedback, looking forward to doing further work on this piece in the future. 

Michel.R.E

  • Administrator
  • Hero Member
  • *****
  • Posts: 4,333
  • Karma: 216
  • B.FA (composition) M.Mus (composition)
    • Les Éditions du Dos Blanc
Re: A short little etude for piano
« Reply #5 on: June 17, 2017, 03:04:00 PM »
I think the title should definitely be changed. It doesn't really highlight a technical element in any really prominent manner. Prelude would probably be a more appropriate title.

I WOULD suggest that there be pedal changes here and there, however. There are a few spots where you move into quite chromatically different landscape, then return to your "home" material, but within a very short time. On an electronic piano/sampler, the sound doesn't carry the way it would with a real piano. With a real piano that will be MUCH muddier sounding.

I'd just write "ped sempre" with a short dashed line under the staff, and mark off those single spots where there are pedal changes.
"Writing music to be revolutionary is like cooking to be famous: Music’s main function is not revolution. – Alan Belkin "

"Saying something new about something old is still saying something new. – Jamie Kowalski"

Jamie Kowalski

  • Hero Member
  • *****
  • Posts: 1,478
  • Karma: 135
    • All Hands Music
Re: A short little etude for piano
« Reply #6 on: July 12, 2017, 09:55:40 AM »
I didn't care for the amount of pedaling, especially at changes in underlying harmony.

I think the use of the written accents throughout the bass is much overdone. In the first three systems, every left hand note is accented, but to what end? Are you just trying to make the line more prominent? Any good performer would bring it out anyway, as it is the part that is changing.

At mm 43, you start notating dynamics and hairpins under both staves. There isn't any good reason to do this, since they markings are identical.

The sections that begin mms 76 and 94 could be written better. Instead of switching dynamics for one eighth note only, I would advise using a sfz instead. It would keep the eye from having to wander up and down looking to see what dynamic is current. In general, I think fff markings don't have much place here.

FossMaNo1

  • Hero Member
  • *****
  • Posts: 786
  • Karma: 36
Re: A short little etude for piano
« Reply #7 on: July 25, 2017, 03:47:35 PM »
Overall, I really like the piece. It has some interesting tonality and shifts in that tonality. I admire works that have odd meters (like yours in 5/4) that manage to not "feel" as if they are in odd meters. I would have liked to have heard a bit of a breath or break in the running right hand...just to give the ear something different to listen to. The last measure in the left hand seem out of character for the piece (in my opinion). I guess, I was expecting the sound to fade out, not be so heavy-handed.
C. Foster Payne
Worship Leader at Arapahoe Road Baptist Church, martial artist, Cowboy, karateka, father, husband...wannabe composer
"If you get to thinkin' you're a person of some influence, try orderin' somebody else's dog around."